Sports people can be seen in many different ways, people can hate them or love them. Sports people deserve to be acknowledged as role models because people can look at their lifestyle and start to look up to them. For example ronaldinho had a poor lifestyle as a kid but kept persevering to become a footballer and became one of the best footballers to ever live. Everyone has their own opinion but sports (Wo)men deserve to be role models.
December 13, 2014 at 11:25 am
Hello Aaron,
I’m really pleased to see you using your blog. There are some real positive aspects of your work here: you have used an example and you are beginning to use some more sophisticated vocabulary.
Target:
Re-read this and identify where you might have repeated yourself and how you will need to vary your vocabulary. Re-draft to show these changes.